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Tom Comitta

Tom Comitta lives in San Francisco, CA where runs a workshop on poetics and edits ONE DED COW.  His work is forthcoming or has appeared online at elimae and Art Practical and in print in Try!, New American Writing, and VOLT.  In 2007, his poem "for real" received the James "Jake" Cranage and Mathew Milhelcic Poetry Awards at the Pennsylvania State University.  Currently he is pursuing his MFA in Writing at California College of the Arts and working on a book, a re-curation, of text found in the 75th Anniversary Show at the San Francisco Museum of Modern Art.

SIX RUNAWAY BUNNIES
 - after Margaret Wise Brown




1

                      was a                                wanted             away.
           said                                am                 away.”
                     away,” said                                             after
               are

                     after          said
                           a              a           stream
and                      away

                            a              a           stream,” said
                           a fisherman and

                             a fisherman,” said
                           a                      mountain,           above

                            a                       mountain           above
said                                        a mountain         
and                                               are.”

                            a mountain
said
                 a                   a               garden.”

                            a                   a               garden,”
said                                        a gardener and

             are a gardener and
said                                                 a
and      away

                            a          and       away
said                                        a         that

                            a             said
                           a           sailboat,
and           sail away

                             a sailboat and sail away
said
and                                 want

                                              and                    said
                                      and        away      a            trapeze.”

                                    a            trapeze,” said
                 a                   walker,
and           walk across        air

                             a                  walker and walk across        air,”
said                                                 a
and                 a
                             a                  and                 a
said
and catch                    arms and

                   said                                              as
stay                am and

And
“Have a carrot,” said



2

Once there         little                         wanted
      he                     mother,
                                                 mother,                    after
               are        little

                     after me,”         the little
            become                              stream


              become                             stream,”                mother,
            become    fisherman

              become    fisherman,”        the little
            become                   the                              above

              become                  the                             above me,”
                mother,            be                       climber
                                  where         are.”

              become                      climber,”
         the little
            be                         hidden garden.”

              become                        hidden garden,”
               mother,             be    gardener

             are    gardener                  me,”
         the little                          be


             become                                               me,”
               mother,             be    tree                 come home

             become    tree,”          the little
            become    little


             become                                                       me,”
               mother,             become the
                         where

              become the                            me,”          the little
                    the                                                         trapeze.”

                                                  trapeze,”                mother,
            be    tightrope walker,
                                      the

              become    tightrope walker                              the
        the                           become    little
                           house.”
              become    little                                   house,”
        the mother                           become           mother


                           the                                           well
        where                  be

              he
                                       the mother



3

                                little
           said      his                 “I
“If                            said his                  “I will
                             little

“If                                   said        little
“I will                   fish in
        I will swim

“If                           fish in                               said his
“I will                   fisherman         I will fish

“If                           fisherman,” said        little
“I will                                         mountain, high

“If                                                 mountain high
said his                “I will          mountain climber,
        I will climb

“If                          mountain climber,”
said        little
“I will                      in    hidden

“If                                        in    hidden
said his                “I will                                   I will find

“If                                            find
said        little               “I will         bird


“If                           bird
said his                “I will
 
“If                                      said        little
“I will                   little sailboat
        I will sail

“If                           sailboat         sail
said his                “I will                       wind
                                      I

“If                               wind                            said       little
“I will join        circus                                 flying

“If              flying          flying                   said his
“I will         tightrope
        I will                              air

“If                           tightrope                                                   air,”
said                      “I will                   little
                into

“If                           little                        into
said                                    “I will
                          in

                  said                       “I might
                     I                              little


                              said



4

Once                                             who               to
So               to        mother,
       you                                   mother,                              you.
For you

       you
            become                   trout
                                       from you.”

      you become                    trout                                mother,
            become                                                  for you.”

      you become
            become    rock on        mountain,          above you.”

      you become    rock on        mountain          above
               mother,                     mountain
                              to             you

      you become    mountain

                    crocus

      you become    crocus
               mother,                                                                 you.”

      you

                        from you.”

      you become                                     from
               mother,                                      you come home to.”

      you become
            become             sailboat,
                                    from you.”

      you become    sailboat                          from
               mother,              become
        blow you                          to go.”

      you become                          blow
             join                                           on

      you go            on                                                mother,
                    tightrope
                            across              to you.”

      you become    tightrope                                across
                                          become             boy
                into    house.”

      you become              boy                into    house,”
                mother                          become your mother
                   you                                      you.”


                                           your

         so
                carrot,”                mother



5

                                          bunny                             run
                                                          running
      you run                                                        run           you.
        you                        bunny.

      you run                                             bunny,
                                              trout
                                                  you.”

      you                                   trout
                                                                                   you.”

      you                                                                  bunny,
                                                    mountain,                      you.”

      you                                         mountain
                                                   mountain
                                              you

      you                   mountain
                         bunny,
                     crocus

      you                   crocus
                                                                                               you.”

      you
                         bunny,
                                  you.”

      you
                                                                   you

      you                                                      bunny,

                                              you.”

      you

                  you

      you                                                                                     bunny,
                           circus

      you

                                                          you.”

      you
                bunny,
        run            house.”

      you                                            run             house,”
                              bunny,                            your
                   you                              hug you.”

“Shucks,”                 bunny,                 just
                                           your           bunny.”


                                                            bunny.



6

                                          bunny                                    away.
                                                                         away.”
                     away,”                                                             you.
        you        my          bunny.

      you                                                    bunny,

                             away           you.”

      you
                                                                                  you.”

      you                                                                  bunny,
                                                                                             you.”

      you

                                               you

      you
                          bunny,


      you
                                                                                               you.”

      you
                         bunny,
        fly away           you.”

      you                                    fly away
                                                                   you

you                                                             bunny,

                          away          you.”

      you                                                 away

                  you

                                                                                                  bunny,
                                               fly away          flying

      you      flying          flying

                                                          you.”

      you
                bunny,                                        boy


      you                             boy
                              bunny,                            your
                   you      my                           you.”

                                  bunny,
                                           your           bunny.”


                                                            bunny.






Tom Comitta comments:

"Six Runaway Bunnies" was written for a reading at She Works Flexible Now (Berkeley, CA).  Lynne McCabe, the founder and curator of the space, asked the readers to respond to any book by Margaret Wise Brown.  In responding to The Runaway Bunny, I developed a procedure (a mashup of erasure and transgram) that I call inflationary erasure.  In this procedure I take Brown's original text and erase it six times, each time including only words containing a certain vowel.  The first section includes only words that contain the vowel [a].  The second includes only words containing the vowel [e].  The third contains [i].  And so on.  The six erasures together inflate Brown's text by including many words (words containing two or more vowels) from the original text more than once.  For example, "bunny" is inflated.

 

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